不錯啊，很清楚！
Very clear but, what is the result? Where is the climax?
第三張lolllllll
其實我唔太睇得出佢之前約咗人，連帶就唔太明最後嗰兩張
我明wo
-where did you establish he had an engagement after his game?-you have missed out the TIME element when he finds out there's no food at home and he has a date to go- where is the climax?
Please change your font setting, DO NOT USE HANDWRITING FONTS!!! IT'S HARD TO READ!!!!!
I tried to show he had a engagement through the third photo that he was looking at his watch. And the climax is in the seventh photo that he was running down stairs.Thanks for your options, I knew I still have a lot of things need to improve.btw, I had changed the font setting.
不錯啊，很清楚！
回覆刪除Very clear but, what is the result? Where is the climax?
回覆刪除第三張lolllllll
回覆刪除其實我唔太睇得出佢之前約咗人，連帶就唔太明最後嗰兩張
回覆刪除我明wo
回覆刪除-where did you establish he had an engagement after his game?
回覆刪除-you have missed out the TIME element when he finds out there's no food at home and he has a date to go
- where is the climax?
Please change your font setting, DO NOT USE HANDWRITING FONTS!!! IT'S HARD TO READ!!!!!
回覆刪除I tried to show he had a engagement through the third photo that he was looking at his watch. And the climax is in the seventh photo that he was running down stairs.
回覆刪除Thanks for your options, I knew I still have a lot of things need to improve.
btw, I had changed the font setting.